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KDY J-34 Assault Fighter Mark III

 
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H3D1



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PostPosted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 6:11 pm    Post subject: KDY J-34 Assault Fighter Mark III Reply with quote

This is my first submission, my Kuat Drive Yards J-34 Assault Fighter Mark III. This is the third generation of the KDY Assault Fighter, which is found in the customs section of FBTB.net, under HD31. I would post the link to it, but the site is not loading for me. Comments and Constructive Criticism welcome!
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 8:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Cool! I like it.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 10:02 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The FBTB customs section was abandoned due to utter lack of updating, but feel free to add your pics (and the previous version) to the FBTB outpost on Flickr.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 11:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

This ship is okay, but it could be better. First off, I'd suggest removing the guns attached to the body. They look unnessasary and somewhat tacked on. Second, the wings could also be more bulky, adding another layer of plates would look good. I know you tried to make it studless, but the tiles there look too forced. I would also suggest making the nose 2-4 studs shorter, as it looks too long right now.
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 28, 2008 3:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A good job. I like the canopy with the slopes behind it, and the overall concept frame. However I feel as if it is overburdened with firepower.
I think it should look more or less like this (pardon the terrible MS paint editing):

Also, the neon green engines just don't flow with the color scheme, which in itself is only slightly flawed - try taking out the black and light bley. Dark red is a good base/acompanying color for any Republic (?) fighter.
Keep up the good work, but there are a few things that could improve here. Smile
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